I am now on SoundCloud as Murmurations

Hi folks !

I'm finally coming out as a songwriter. Only one song uploaded as of now (and it's in french !) but I plan to update regularly.

Little backstory : self taught musician, I played extensively from 15 to 30 years old then gave up completely before going back at it at 45, a year ago.

Enjoy !

https://soundcloud.com/user-77008379

I will have to check it out on my tablet later...this old laptop can't do things like that anymore.
Congrats on your achievement...very cool for you!

Will check it out tomorrow.....looking forward to it.

I wish i had a scrap of musical talent!

I have a fucking shitload of lyrics to 'songs' but as i haven't got any musical talent at all they'll never be anything other than words.

Will check it out tomorrow.....looking forward to it.

I wish i had a scrap of musical talent!

I have a fucking shitload of lyrics to 'songs' but as i haven't got any musical talent at all they'll never be anything other than words.

You need to find a collaborator like Bernie Taupin and Tim Rice did.  Of course they had good lyrics as well.

Quote from: an tha on February 28, 2020, 03:57:13 PM

Will check it out tomorrow.....looking forward to it.

I wish i had a scrap of musical talent!

I have a fucking shitload of lyrics to 'songs' but as i haven't got any musical talent at all they'll never be anything other than words.

You need to find a collaborator like Bernie Taupin and Tim Rice did.  Of course they had good lyrics as well.

Ah fuck i knew something was missing!

Quote from: strudelwithcream on February 28, 2020, 03:59:33 PM

Quote from: an tha on February 28, 2020, 03:57:13 PM

Will check it out tomorrow.....looking forward to it.

I wish i had a scrap of musical talent!

I have a fucking shitload of lyrics to 'songs' but as i haven't got any musical talent at all they'll never be anything other than words.

You need to find a collaborator like Bernie Taupin and Tim Rice did.  Of course they had good lyrics as well.

Ah fuck i knew something was missing!

Any other advice, just drop by.

Quote from: an tha on February 28, 2020, 04:27:02 PM

Quote from: strudelwithcream on February 28, 2020, 03:59:33 PM

Quote from: an tha on February 28, 2020, 03:57:13 PM

Will check it out tomorrow.....looking forward to it.

I wish i had a scrap of musical talent!

I have a fucking shitload of lyrics to 'songs' but as i haven't got any musical talent at all they'll never be anything other than words.

You need to find a collaborator like Bernie Taupin and Tim Rice did.  Of course they had good lyrics as well.

Ah fuck i knew something was missing!

Any other advice, just drop by.

Comforting

just listened...a few thoughts:

1) love your voice. kickin' melody, too.

2) very cool guitar break beginning around 3:30. Reminded me of Simple Minds' Charlie Burchill when he's in a more aggressive mood. Some of the slide bits throughout do as well.

3) the electronic drums were more than a little jarring when they first came in, but that's not a bad thing.

4) Things got very sonically dense between 1:00 and 1:30. The bass in particular seemed to drop in volume beginning around 1:15-1:20. You might wanna go back and strip away/mute a track or two that's eating up lo-mid room through that section so the bass can peek out more. If you don't wanna lose anything, try panning a couple of the guitar and key tracks to at least 9 o'clock and 3 o'clock, while placing the bass straight up the middle of the mix.

Thank you, you’re absolutely right. I m doing everything with my iPhone, using the earphones mic. I get a decent result but I need to compress heavily the voices & guitars. I haven’t quite figured it out yet.

Will check it out tomorrow.....looking forward to it.

I wish i had a scrap of musical talent!

I have a fucking shitload of lyrics to 'songs' but as i haven't got any musical talent at all they'll never be anything other than words.

That’s not necessarily a bad thing. Don’t let this restrain you in your creativity. Lyrics can turn into prose or poems...

Listened to it this morning...very, very pretty...lovely guitar work. I wish I understood French!

I like the song generally - really like your voice.

My only slight criticism/question is i feel that maybe your love of u2 affects your creative process a bit too much - and maybe not in a good way...it felt to me that some of the guitar parts pushed forward in the mix that were a bit u2 like came at the expense of other more potentially interesting sonics.

For those of us who can't speak French have you got the lyrics in English at all

Listened to it this morning...very, very pretty...lovely guitar work. I wish I understood French!

Thanks !

Here’s a quick translation :

Fear… sometimes I’m scared of my own shadow
That other me, sadder, darker
I’d like to be serene, collected
But I stand at the opposite

Fear leads to anger
And anger leads to my father
I’m breaking the cycle
I take fury and recycle

If I face my fears
And I remain lucid
The one that freezes my heart
Is the fear of void
Vertigo strikes me
But my legs are strong
With my wooden guitar
I stand on the edge of void

Fear… sometimes I’m afraid to win
And afraid to lose. How can I explain it ?
I shiver at the thought of being happy
Am I worthy ?

I’d like my children to see
What’s best in me
They’ll see tomorrow
The one that I become

If I face my fears
And I remain lucid
The one that freezes my heart
Is the fear of void
If I prevail soon
And I become a fear slayer
If only one remains
That’s the fear of void

If I face my fears
And I remain lucid
The one that freezes my heart
Is the fear of void
if I bite the apple
Then maybe I can
Become the man
That I’ve always wanted to be

That I’ve always wanted to be

Wanted to be

"Fear… sometimes I’m afraid to win
And afraid to lose. How can I explain it ?
I shiver at the thought of being happy"

wow...yes.

I like the song generally - really like your voice.

My only slight criticism/question is i feel that maybe your love of u2 affects your creative process a bit too much - and maybe not in a good way...it felt to me that some of the guitar parts pushed forward in the mix that were a bit u2 like came at the expense of other more potentially interesting sonics.

For those of us who can't speak French have you got the lyrics in English at all

Thanks. I’ve had a few comments about my voice. It’s encouraging because I’ve really struggled with my voice over the years. Still do. But it shows I’m on the right path. At least I’m not trying to sound like anyone else.

Which leads to the fair criticism you’ve expressed. You’re absolutely right, and you know what ? I pulled a U2 : that song is a few months old, I had originally recorded a different, more radical break with flutes and clarinet instead of a guitar solo. But I grew tired of it and thought it was self indulgent. I chickened out at the last minute. I recorded a new guitar solo (and new vocals) this week which lead me to more familiar U2-esque territory. I figured it would be an appropriate introduction to my work since my friends know me as « the U2 fan Â» but maybe I was wrong. And it’s only now that you notice it that I’m having second thoughts about it...

I’ll upload the other mix for you to judge. Something tells me you’ll like it better.